by ResIsBestStat Sat Jun 01, 2013 6:27 pmHello guys, I'm here to ask you an important matter today, so please read all of this ****.
Today I finally decided to fulfill one of my dreams: make a short film. I will film it during summer and put it on youtube for everyone's pleasure, I already wrote the script and have all the actors ready, however I'm asking you to review it and suggest me things.
Here's the plot:
Mahe is a young srilankan man who lives a mediocre life, Sri Lanka is now in his opinion a "****" since many people are racist with each other and local gang wars ensue. His only friend was a young man like him, but after he discovered that his best friend's father was a gang lord, his friendship was never the same. Every single day, Mahe's mother and father are tormented by the gang lord's men who ask for money in exchange of "protection". One day while Mahe searches through the internet and suddenly finds something called a "superhero", he searches more about these things and is introduced to the world of comics and movies about them. Mahe quickly thinks that he can do the same thing and makes a costume made of cloaks and bike helmets, he also builds homemade weapons like pepper sprays and camera tasers. When the gangsters return again to extort money from Mahe's parents, he surprises them both and tasers them. After hearing the news, the gang lord sends more gangsters to teach Mahe's parents a lesson. Mahe sees multiple men armed with weapons approach and decides to take them out before they can harm his parents, he is however shot after trying. The gang lord comes personally to see this "hero" and unmasks him, he then procedes to torture and humiliate him before throwing him in a river. Mahe survives, but barely. He however sees his parents getting tortured and the rage fuels him, he steals a gun from a drunk gangster and adds a homemade bottle silencer, he then kills every gangster and strangles the gang lord, killing him.
The following day, Mahe's parents still didn't find out about him being the masked man, he then throws his costume and weapon, saying that being a super hero is not worth it.
A week later, Mahe reads through the local news and finds out that multiple vigilantes inspired by him decided to fight the mobsters of the city, after seeing how much a small person could do, Mahe returns to the place where he threw his costume and puts it back on, the film ends.
So what did you think of the plot? Give it something between 0 and 10!
Today I finally decided to fulfill one of my dreams: make a short film. I will film it during summer and put it on youtube for everyone's pleasure, I already wrote the script and have all the actors ready, however I'm asking you to review it and suggest me things.
Here's the plot:
Mahe is a young srilankan man who lives a mediocre life, Sri Lanka is now in his opinion a "****" since many people are racist with each other and local gang wars ensue. His only friend was a young man like him, but after he discovered that his best friend's father was a gang lord, his friendship was never the same. Every single day, Mahe's mother and father are tormented by the gang lord's men who ask for money in exchange of "protection". One day while Mahe searches through the internet and suddenly finds something called a "superhero", he searches more about these things and is introduced to the world of comics and movies about them. Mahe quickly thinks that he can do the same thing and makes a costume made of cloaks and bike helmets, he also builds homemade weapons like pepper sprays and camera tasers. When the gangsters return again to extort money from Mahe's parents, he surprises them both and tasers them. After hearing the news, the gang lord sends more gangsters to teach Mahe's parents a lesson. Mahe sees multiple men armed with weapons approach and decides to take them out before they can harm his parents, he is however shot after trying. The gang lord comes personally to see this "hero" and unmasks him, he then procedes to torture and humiliate him before throwing him in a river. Mahe survives, but barely. He however sees his parents getting tortured and the rage fuels him, he steals a gun from a drunk gangster and adds a homemade bottle silencer, he then kills every gangster and strangles the gang lord, killing him.
The following day, Mahe's parents still didn't find out about him being the masked man, he then throws his costume and weapon, saying that being a super hero is not worth it.
A week later, Mahe reads through the local news and finds out that multiple vigilantes inspired by him decided to fight the mobsters of the city, after seeing how much a small person could do, Mahe returns to the place where he threw his costume and puts it back on, the film ends.
So what did you think of the plot? Give it something between 0 and 10!
