Who wants to help me proofread?

So I wrote a poem for my English class and I kinda based it off of DkS. I'm just a little worried about not finding stupid mistakes. Any help would be appreciated!

Spoiler:

Looks fine. If I changed anything it would to change the punctuation at the end of each stanza's second line to a period. Make that pause a little more emphasized

Looks good to me. I probably would have switched the order of some of the words had it been me writing it, but that's it.

Should see you through in grand style, though.

OH I WILL I WILL PICK ME.

I'd remove the commas from the end of the lines, it will look more professional. I know you're taught to always use proper grammar, etc, but rules are there to be broken. No one would bother with this stuff if it was all the same.

The only thing I would say is that the second line of the last stanza feels a bit clunky - because you've used roughly uniform ones in the rest, it makes that one seem like a bit of a mouthful. Only a very small detail though, overall you did good.

Thanks dudebros!

You know there's no set rules for grammar or punctuation in poetry right? As long as you've spelled everything right you can do it anyway you want. It's completely subjective. Any teacher who tells you otherwise is kind of an idiot.

You can use those things to better convey meaning, there are all kinds of neat tricks to do it too, but there aren't set rules for it. Poetry is kind of the exception to the rules.

I found a hideous and glaring mistake!

BIG TIME MASTER wrote:I found a hideous and glaring mistake!

Oh?

Yes, you are really going to need to fix it.

BIG TIME MASTER wrote:I found a hideous and glaring mistake!

In the last stanza, right? :suspect:

Haha, I'm just messing with you.



Nice poem though.

PlasticandRage wrote:You know there's no set rules for grammar or punctuation in poetry right? As long as you've spelled everything right you can do it anyway you want. It's completely subjective. Any teacher who tells you otherwise is kind of an idiot.

You can use those things to better convey meaning, there are all kinds of neat tricks to do it too, but there aren't set rules for it. Poetry is kind of the exception to the rules.

THERE ARE NO RULES!

Rudmed wrote:

PlasticandRage wrote:You know there's no set rules for grammar or punctuation in poetry right? As long as you've spelled everything right you can do it anyway you want. It's completely subjective. Any teacher who tells you otherwise is kind of an idiot.

You can use those things to better convey meaning, there are all kinds of neat tricks to do it too, but there aren't set rules for it. Poetry is kind of the exception to the rules.

THERE ARE NO RULES!

Punches the wall, causing it to explode into a million pieces. Each piece morphs into a butterfly that fly away, but as they reach the tree tops, they turn into bricks.

AAHHHHHHH NO RULES! Wait, what if that last post was poetry too!! AHHHHHHHH

This thread is a lot deeper than I thought it would be lol.

All I'm gonna say is

One of my teachers taught me that good form and uniform **** is the way to go
The other said "*** da police"

I hated that first teacher and all her work. I own the second one's books.

Let's smash some poetry up u guiz.

The point is you're free to have fun with it and be clever and approach it any way you want. Poetry doesn't necessarily have to be stuffy or a clear articulation of emotion or any connotative thing you might think it'd have to be. That's not to say that poetry can't be any of those things, or that I don't think poetry that is those things isn't a valid form of self expression, but for me, when I write poetry for school, if I'm not having fun than I haven't done it right.

Just got the poem back, got an A

Nice work man.

And I helped!


Or was that shake n' bake?


Actually I did nothing. Great job